작업 예시 · WORD 추적 변경, 이어서 폴란드어 번역

부모에게 보내는 건강 관련 서신을 변경 내용 추적을 사용하여 간소화하고 폴란드어로 번역

지역 보건 보호팀이 학교에서 수막구균성 질환 사례가 발생한 뒤 영국 보건안전청(UKHSA)이 만든 부모 안내 서신 템플릿을 받았습니다. 팀은 문해력이 낮은 부모도 이해할 수 있도록 같은 Word 파일에서 추적 변경 내용으로 재작성해 달라고 에 요청했으며, 이는 담당 전문의가 각 편집을 수락하거나 거부할 수 있게 하기 위해서였습니다.

는 본문을 짧은 문장으로 다시 쓰면서 모든 의학적 사실, 제목, 연락처, 스타일을 유지했습니다. 담당 전문의가 변경 내용을 수락한 뒤에는 그 두 가지 편집을 새 추적 변경으로 반영했고, 이어서 폴란드계 가정이 많은 학교를 위해 깔끔한 폴란드어 사본을 만들었습니다.

  • 19.8 → 7.9문장당 평균 단어 수
  • 169수락 또는 거절할 추적 삽입 및 삭제 내용
  • 0요청된 오타 수정 외에 변경된 제목, 스타일 또는 표 셀
  • 2요청 2에 의해 수정된 단락, 그 외 변경 없음

실제 파일 열기

실제 실행에서 나온 파일입니다. 다운로드하여 Word에서 여세요. 추적 사본에는 모든 변경 사항이 표시되어 있습니다.

파일 출처: GOV.UK, 영국 보건안전청, “수막구균성 질환 학교 사례 발생 후 부모 안내” (수막구균 질환 관리 지침). 오픈 정부 라이선스 v3.0에 따라 라이선스가 부여된 공공 부문 정보를 포함합니다. UKHSA는 이 예시를 검토하거나 보증하지 않았습니다.

01 · 시작 파일

고유한 스타일과 병합된 셀이 있는 표를 포함한 3페이지 분량의 템플릿

이 서신은 수막염, 패혈증(septicaemia), 전신 감염 반응(sepsis), 항생제를 받는 대상, 언제 NHS 111이나 999에 전화해야 하는지, 연령별 아동 예방 접종을 설명합니다. 문장은 약 20단어이며 “뇌수막”이나 “과도한 면역 반응” 같은 단어가 들어 있습니다.

이것은 실제 Word 템플릿입니다. 사용자 정의 제목과 본문 스타일, 글머리 기호 스타일의 두 자선 단체 연락처, 노란색 “연락처 삽입” 자리 표시자, 왼쪽 열이 두 행을 병합하는 13개 증상 표가 포함되어 있습니다. 재작성 과정에서 이 모든 요소가 유지되어야 했습니다.

원본 문서 이미지게시된 UKHSA 템플릿 서신 1페이지
게시된 템플릿 1페이지.원본 열기

02 · 요청 1

“문해력이 낮은 부모를 위해 추적 변경 내용으로 재작성해 주세요”

보건 보호팀이 입력한 내용

This is the UKHSA template letter to parents after a school case of meningococcal disease (3 pages). Please rewrite the body text so parents with low literacy can follow it - short sentences, everyday words, reading age about 9-11.

- Keep every medical fact: what meningitis, septicaemia and sepsis are, who gets antibiotics, when to call NHS 111 or 999, and all the vaccine ages
- Keep the four section headings and the symptoms table as they are - in the table only fix the typo 'irritabilty'
- Keep the two charity contacts and the yellow 'insert contact...' placeholders in the last paragraph unchanged
- Keep the existing paragraph styles

Please do it as tracked changes in this same Word file, so our consultant can accept or reject each edit.

의 처리 내용

  • 본문 단락을 짧은 문장과 일상적인 단어로 재작성했습니다. “뇌수막(meninges)”은 “뇌와 척수를 감싸는 막”으로 변경되었습니다.
  • 요청에 나열된 모든 사실을 유지했습니다. 모든 백신 접종 연령과 25세 생일까지의 보충 접종 안내도 포함합니다.
  • 네 개의 제목, 두 자선 단체 연락처, 노란색 자리 표시자를 그대로 두었으며, 표에서는 “irritabilty(짜증)” 오타만 수정했습니다.
  • 모든 단락 스타일과 병합된 표 셀을 유지했습니다.
  • 서신을 두 가지 버전으로 전달했습니다. 깔끔한 새 버전과 모든 편집 내용이 Word 추적 변경으로 표시된 원본 사본입니다.
communication-with-parents-following-a-school-case-of-IMD__tracked.docx추적 변경 내용
798 → 649 단어

Important: meningococcal disease information

Following a case in school (please read all pages)

Dear Parent or Guardian

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A pupil at your child’s school has been admitted to hospital with suspectedis in hospital. Doctors think it is meningococcal disease which. This disease can cause both meningitis and septicaemiatwo illnesses. One is meningitis. Meningitis is when bacteriameans germs reach the meninges (the lining around the brain and spinal cord) and cause. The lining swells, and this is very dangerous swelling. The other illness is septicaemia. Septicaemia is when bacteria enter the bloodstream and cause blood poisoning. means germs get into the blood. They poison the blood.

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Both forms of meningococcal disease can trigger sepsis – an overwhelming and life-threatening immune response to infection which can lead to organ failure. illnesses can cause sepsis. Sepsis is when the body fights infection too hard. This can harm the body a lot. It can stop organs from working. It can kill.

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This letter givestells you some information about the disease. There is no reason for you to make any change in the school routine and no reason for children to be keptPlease do not worry. Your child can still go to school. School will run as normal. No child needs to stay at home.

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How the disease spreads

The meningococcal bacteria very rarely spreads from child to child withinThis disease does not often spread in class or school. The bacteria that cause the illness live naturally ingerms live at the back of the throat and can spread between people in droplets. They pass in tiny drops from the mouth and nose. Many people carry the bacteria in their throats without becoming unwellgerms. They do not feel ill.

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Preventing the spread of meningococcal disease

The best way toAntibiotics stop the disease from spreading. is by giving antibiotics to theOnly very close family contacts of the patient with the illnessneed them. That usuallyoften means that only people who live in the same house as the sick child need treatment. School contacts are only very rarely at risk. home. Children at school are almost never at risk.

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The people who need treatment have already been identified and treatedhealth team has found those people. They have had their treatment.

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Symptoms of meningococcal disease

The risk of anotherAnother case in the school is very small, butunlikely. But it is sensible to be aware ofhelps to know the main signs. and symptoms of meningococcal meningitis and septicaemia, outlined below. You can see them in the table below.

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Some common signs and symptoms of meningococcal disease

High temperature

Rapid breathing

Vomiting or diarrhoea and stomach cramps

Joint or muscle pain

Cold hands and feet

Severe headache

Pale blotchy skin

Stiff neck

Confusion and/or irritabiltyirritability

Dislike of bright light

Drowsiness or difficult to wake

Rash or bruising rash

Seizures or fits

OneYou may see one or more of these symptoms may develop and they can appearsigns. They can come in any order.

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Meningococcal disease can be hard to identify at first because it can be like a bad case of flu. However, anyone affected with meningococcal disease will usually become seriously ill within a few hours. You should keep checking your child if they are unwell and contact your GP (family doctor) or NHS 111 for advice if you have any concerns. At first it can look like flu. So it can be hard to spot. A sick person can get very ill within hours. Keep checking your child if they feel unwell. If you are worried, call your GP or NHS 111.

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If you becomeare worried about your child’s condition, particularly if they are getting worse, seek medical help urgently at the closest A&E Department or by dialling 999. , act fast. If your child gets worse, get help urgently. Go to A&E or call 999.

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Be watchful and use your instincts. Early treatment can be life savingKeep a close watch. Trust what you feel. Getting help early can save a life.

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Protecting against meningococcal disease

It is important to be aware that meningococcal disease is caused by different groups of meningococcal bacteria. In the UK meningococcal disease is almost always caused by one of four meningococcal groups commonly known as MenB, MenC, MenW or MenY. These groups of meningococcal disease can be prevented with vaccines. MenA disease is rare in the UK but this can also be prevented by vaccinationMany types of germs cause this disease. In the UK it is almost always MenB, MenC, MenW or MenY. Vaccines can stop these types. MenA is rare in the UK. A vaccine can stop MenA too.

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The following meningococcalUK gives these vaccines are offered as part of theas routine UK schedule:

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MenB vaccine (which protects againststops most cases of MenB disease), routinely offered as. Babies get 3 doses given as part of the infant immunisation programme. They get them at 8 weeks, 16 weeks and 12 months of age. Children born in the UK. All children born on or after 1 May 2015 have beenwere offered this vaccine.

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Hib-MenC vaccine (which protects againststops MenC disease), routinely offered. Children get it at 12 months. asIt is part of the routine childhood immunisation programmevaccine plan.

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MenACWY vaccine (which protects againststops MenA, MenC, MenW and MenY disease) routinely offered. Young people get it at 13 to 15 years of age. old.

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AnyoneDid your child miss the teen MenACWY vaccine? If they were born on or after 1 September 1996 who was eligible but missed their teenage MenACWY vaccine can still have the vaccine, they can still have it. They can have it up to their 25th birthday. Anyone who isAre you older and starting university for the first time? You can still have the vaccineit up to theiryour 25th birthday. For a young personIf your child is still at school speak to their, ask the school provider to arrange vaccination otherwise you will need to make an appointment with theirvaccine team. If not, book with your GP practice.

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Please ensurecheck your child is up to date with their routine vaccinations with their. Ask your GP practice. Even if theyyour child had MenC vaccine when they were younger, it is important that teenagers get the MenACWY vaccine as it boosts protection against MenC disease and protects against more groups of meningococcal disease. as a baby, they still need MenACWY as a teen. It boosts MenC cover. It also guards against more types.

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Be watchfulWatch for signs and symptoms even if your child is up to date with their vaccinations as available vaccines do not protect against all causes of the diseaseafter vaccines. Vaccines do not stop every cause.

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All meningococcal vaccines offered to eligible children as part of routine programmes are freely available on the NHS. Vaccines may be available privately for those who are not eligible under these programmes. Meningococcal disease can affect anyone of any age but the national immunisation programmes targetRoutine vaccines are free on the NHS for eligible children. If you are not eligible, you may pay for them privately. This disease can affect any age. But the NHS plan guards those most at risk.

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Further information on meningococcal disease is available from:

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• The Meningitis Research Foundation, www.meningitis.org telephone: 0808 800 3344

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• Meningitis Now, www.meningitisnow.org telephone: 0808 80 10 388 helpline email address: [email protected]

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If you need further support or advice, please contact insert contact details or call us insert contact telephone number.

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Word에서 보여주는 서신 전체의 추적 사본입니다. 삭제된 내용은 취소선이 그어져 있고, 삽입된 내용은 밑줄이 쳐져 있습니다. 수정 전(Before) 또는 후(After)로 전환하여 표시 없이 버전을 읽을 수 있으며, 여백의 숫자는 단락당 단어 수입니다.

확인 완료: 추적 사본에는 71개의 삽입과 98개의 삭제가 있습니다. 단락 스타일은 템플릿과 1:1로 일치하며, 5개의 제목은 변경되지 않았습니다. 표는 여전히 7행 2열의 병합된 셀을 유지하고 있으며, 유일한 변경 사항은 “irritability(짜증)”입니다. 백신 연령, NHS 111, 999, 응급실(A&E) 및 두 자선 단체 연락처는 모두 포함되어 있고 자리 표시자는 노란색 강조 표시를 유지합니다.

03 · 요청 2

모두 수락한 다음, 두 가지 수정 사항을 새로운 추적 변경 내용으로 작성하기

보건 보호팀이 입력한 내용

The consultant has reviewed it. Please:
1. Accept all the tracked changes from your rewrite.
2. Make sure the word 'septicaemia' is used (not replaced by a simpler word), with a short explanation in brackets the first time it appears, e.g. 'septicaemia (blood poisoning)'.
3. In the last paragraph, replace 'insert contact details' with 'the Thames Valley Health Protection Team' and 'insert contact telephone number' with '0344 225 3861', and remove the yellow highlight.

Make changes 2 and 3 as new tracked changes.

의 처리 내용

  • 요청 1의 모든 변경 사항이 수락된 깔끔한 버전에서 작업을 수행했습니다.
  • “패혈증(septicaemia)”이라는 단어를 유지하고 처음 등장할 때 괄호 안에 “(혈액 중독)”이라는 짧은 설명을 추가했습니다.
  • 두 개의 자리 표시자 대신 팀 이름과 전화번호를 넣고 노란색 강조 표시를 제거했습니다.
  • 이러한 변경 사항만 보여주는 새로운 추적 변경 사본을 전달했습니다.
communication-with-parents-following-a-school-case-of-IMD (v2)__tracked.docx추적 변경 내용

A pupil at your child’s school is in hospital. Doctors think it is meningococcal disease. This disease can cause two illnesses. One is meningitis. Meningitis means germs reach the lining around the brain and spinal cord. The lining swells, and this is very dangerous. The other illness is septicaemia (blood poisoning). Septicaemia means germs get into the blood. They poison the blood.

Protecting against meningococcal disease

If you need further support or advice, please contact insert contact detailsthe Thames Valley Health Protection Team or call us insert contact telephone number0344 225 3861.

새로운 추적 변경 사본의 변경된 두 단락입니다. 나머지 서신 내용은 동일합니다.

확인 완료: 새로운 추적 사본에는 해당 두 단락에 정확히 3개의 삽입과 2개의 삭제가 포함되어 있습니다. 마지막 단락에 강조 표시가 남아 있지 않으며 스타일과 표는 변경되지 않았습니다.

04 · 요청 3

최종 서신의 깔끔한 폴란드어 버전 만들기

보건 보호팀이 입력한 내용

Now make a Polish translation of the final letter as a separate Word file. Translate the accepted text only - the Polish copy should have no tracked changes. Keep the same headings, styles and the 2-column symptoms table, and leave all phone numbers, web addresses, the email address and the vaccine names (MenB, Hib-MenC, MenACWY) exactly as they are.

의 처리 내용

  • 최종 서신에서 별도의 Word 파일을 만들고 번역했으며, 추적 변경 내용은 포함하지 않았습니다.
  • 템플릿의 스타일, 제목, 병합된 셀이 있는 2열 증상 표를 유지했습니다.
  • 999, NHS 111, 모든 전화번호, 두 웹 주소, 이메일 주소, MenB, Hib-MenC, MenACWY를 그대로 남겨 두었습니다.
Letter to parents - Polish translation.docx새 파일

Ważne: informacje o chorobie meningokokowej

Po przypadku zachorowania w szkole (prosimy przeczytać wszystkie strony)

Szanowni Rodzice i Opiekunowie

Uczeń ze szkoły Państwa dziecka przebywa w szpitalu. Lekarze podejrzewają chorobę meningokokową. Choroba ta może wywołać dwie choroby. Jedną z nich jest zapalenie opon mózgowych. Zapalenie opon mózgowych oznacza, że zarazki docierają do błon otaczających mózg i rdzeń kręgowy. Błony te puchną, a to jest bardzo niebezpieczne. Drugą chorobą jest posocznica (zakażenie krwi). Posocznica (zakażenie krwi) oznacza, że zarazki dostają się do krwi. Zatruwają krew.

Obie choroby mogą prowadzić do sepsy. Sepsa występuje wtedy, gdy organizm zbyt mocno walczy z zakażeniem. Może to bardzo uszkodzić organizm. Może spowodować, że narządy przestaną działać. Może prowadzić do śmierci.

Ten list zawiera informacje o tej chorobie. Prosimy się nie martwić. Państwa dziecko może nadal chodzić do szkoły. Szkoła będzie działać normalnie. Żadne dziecko nie musi zostawać w domu.

Jak rozprzestrzenia się choroba

Choroba ta rzadko rozprzestrzenia się w klasie lub w szkole. Zarazki żyją w tylnej części gardła. Przenoszą się w drobnych kropelkach z ust i nosa. Wiele osób nosi te zarazki. Nie czują się chore.

Zapobieganie rozprzestrzenianiu się choroby meningokokowej

Antybiotyki powstrzymują rozprzestrzenianie się choroby. Potrzebują ich tylko bardzo bliskie kontakty rodzinne. Zwykle oznacza to tylko osoby mieszkające w tym samym domu. Dzieci w szkole prawie nigdy nie są zagrożone.

Zespół ds. zdrowia odnalazł te osoby. Otrzymały one leczenie.

Objawy choroby meningokokowej

Kolejny przypadek zachorowania w szkole jest bardzo mało prawdopodobny. Warto jednak znać główne objawy. Można je zobaczyć w poniższej tabeli.

Niektóre częste oznaki i objawy choroby meningokokowej

Wysoka gorączka

Szybkie oddychanie

Wymioty lub biegunka i bóle brzucha

Ból stawów lub mięśni

Zimne dłonie i stopy

Silny ból głowy

Blada, plamista skóra

Sztywność karku

Dezorientacja i/lub drażliwość

Unikanie jasnego światła

Senność lub trudności z obudzeniem

Wysypka lub wysypka z siniakami

Drgawki lub napady drgawek

Może wystąpić jeden lub więcej z tych objawów. Mogą pojawić się w dowolnej kolejności.

Na początku może to wyglądać jak grypa. Dlatego trudno to rozpoznać. Chora osoba może bardzo ciężko zachorować w ciągu kilku godzin. Obserwuj dziecko, jeśli źle się czuje. Jeśli się martwisz, zadzwoń do lekarza rodzinnego (GP) lub pod numer NHS 111.

Jeśli się martwisz, działaj szybko. Jeśli stan dziecka się pogarsza, poszukaj pomocy natychmiast. Zgłoś się na SOR (A&E) lub zadzwoń pod numer 999.

Uważnie obserwuj dziecko. Ufaj temu, co czujesz. Wczesna pomoc może uratować życie.

Ochrona przed chorobą meningokokową

Tę chorobę wywołuje wiele rodzajów zarazków. W Wielkiej Brytanii prawie zawsze są to MenB, MenC, MenW lub MenY. Szczepionki mogą chronić przed tymi typami. MenA występuje w Wielkiej Brytanii rzadko. Szczepionka chroni również przed MenA.

W Wielkiej Brytanii rutynowo podaje się następujące szczepionki:

Szczepionka MenB chroni przed większością zachorowań wywołanych przez MenB. Niemowlęta otrzymują 3 dawki. Podaje się je w 8. tygodniu, 16. tygodniu i 12. miesiącu życia. Tę szczepionkę zaproponowano wszystkim dzieciom urodzonym 1 May 2015 lub później.

Szczepionka Hib-MenC chroni przed chorobą wywołaną przez MenC. Dzieci otrzymują ją w 12. miesiącu życia. Jest ona częścią rutynowego kalendarza szczepień.

Szczepionka MenACWY chroni przed chorobami wywołanymi przez MenA, MenC, MenW i MenY. Młodzież otrzymuje ją w wieku od 13 do 15 lat.

Czy Twoje dziecko pominęło szczepienie MenACWY dla nastolatków? Jeśli urodziło się 1 September 1996 lub później, nadal może je otrzymać. Może je otrzymać do swoich 25. urodzin. Czy jesteś osobą starszą i po raz pierwszy zaczynasz studia? Nadal możesz je otrzymać do swoich 25. urodzin. Jeśli Twoje dziecko nadal chodzi do szkoły, zapytaj szkolny zespół ds. szczepień. Jeśli nie, umów się w przychodni lekarza rodzinnego.

Sprawdź, czy Twoje dziecko ma aktualne szczepienia. Zapytaj w przychodni lekarza rodzinnego. Nawet jeśli Twoje dziecko otrzymało szczepionkę MenC jako niemowlę, jako nastolatek nadal potrzebuje szczepionki MenACWY. Wzmacnia ona ochronę przed MenC. Chroni też przed większą liczbą typów.

Obserwuj objawy nawet po szczepieniach. Szczepionki nie chronią przed każdą przyczyną choroby.

Rutynowe szczepionki są bezpłatne w ramach NHS dla uprawnionych dzieci. Jeśli nie są Państwo uprawnieni, mogą Państwo zapłacić za nie prywatnie. Choroba ta może dotknąć osoby w każdym wieku. Program szczepień NHS chroni jednak osoby najbardziej zagrożone.

Dodatkowe informacje na temat choroby meningokokowej są dostępne w:

• The Meningitis Research Foundation, www.meningitis.org telefon: 0808 800 3344

• Meningitis Now, www.meningitisnow.org telefon: 0808 80 10 388 adres e-mail infolinii: [email protected]

Jeśli potrzebują Państwo dodatkowego wsparcia lub porady, prosimy o kontakt z Zespołem Ochrony Zdrowia Thames Valley lub o telefon pod numer 0344 225 3861.

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